From the November 2021 IBDP HL History paper 3 exam
From the markscheme:
The question requires that candidates consider the interrelationship between diplomacy and the outbreak of war in 1914. Candidates may examine the events of 1914 and argue that diplomatic failure during the July Crisis led to war. Others may examine longer-term causes as well. There may be reference to the unpalatable Austrian ultimatum, the Blank Cheque and the telegrams between Kaiser Wilhelm II and Tsar Nicholas II. There may also be an examination of Britain’s lack of clarity regarding the crisis, especially how far she would support France or keep promises to Belgium (Treaty of London). Other factors that led to war were the German desire for war before Russia had fully modernised her army. Candidates may refer to Austria also wanting a local war to weaken Serbia’s position in the Balkans. Other relevant interrelationships may be considered, for example that the Russian General Staff wanted full mobilisation, leading to German mobilisation and the implementation of the Schlieffen Plan. It could also be argued that the broader context of the Alliance system made war very likely and that the assassination of Franz Ferdinand was the “spark” that led to war. Candidates’ opinions or conclusions will be clearly presented and supported by appropriate evidence.
Here is an example written strictly under exam conditions and transcribed below:
The mismanagement of the July Crisis in July of 1914 by Imperial Germany is often regarded as the most important factor that contributed to the outbreak of World War One. The diplomatic collapse, which was evident through Kaiser Wilhelm's going on holiday during the most tense moments and the infamous 'blank cheque' he gave to Austro-Hungary, however, other important causes contributed far more to the outbreak. The diplomatic failure in July was just the final nail in the coffin which kick-started the horrific conflict. This essay will discuss factors such as both Moroccan Crises, Bosnian Crisis, the naval race and many more. A history which just blames a diplomatic failure in July is far too simplistic. We must look at the long-term effects first, those that planted seeds of war onto the European scene, before we examine the short-term cause. Article 231 blames Germany for the war, and it is also known as the 'War Guilt Clause'. While solely blaming one nation for the start of World War One is incredibly biased, undoubtedly, Germany's foreign policy played a huge role in the outbreak of war. When in 1890 Bismarck was sacked, as depicted in the cartoon 'Dropping the Pilot', Germany's foreign policy changed for the worse. In the next two decades, Germany would antagonise major European powers and worsen the tension and rivalries with Britain, Russia, and France. This is much more important than just the short-term cause in 1914. The infamous Zimmerman telegram destroyed the relationship with Britain and forced them to pursue an alliance elsewhere. Along with the naval race and the building of the Dreadnoughts, Britain and Germany grew further apart each year, and in 1906 a détente was reached with France in the following Moroccan Crisis. Germany once again made a critical mistake as they pushed France and Britain closer together. Germany's worst nightmare would come to fruition after this Moroccan Crisis, as a Triple Entente was formed with Russia. As George Kennan himself said, the writer of the notorious long telegram, the Franco-Russian Entente of 1894 and the diplomatic encirclement caused World War One. Once Britain joined this alliance, Germany was now truly diplomatically and territorially encircled. A war would have broken out either way between the Central Powers and the Entente, it was only a matter of time. Therefore, these long-term causes made war inevitable and the main cause for them was German aggressive, confusing foreign policy which continuously worsened tension between European powers. Now, finally, we can look at the short-term causes, particularly the diplomatic failure in July which was previously mentioned. This was the final nail in the coffin. Before that, however, we must discuss the infamous 'Balkan Powder Keg'. Yet again, the problem in the Balkans was inevitable. When United Italy inexplicably invaded Libya, part of the Ottoman Empire, an ally of Germany, the already unstable Ottomans became so much more destabilised. A sudden rise in Balkan nationalism saw the 'Old Man of Europe' hobbling, and the First Balkan War erupted, which many consider the actual start of World War One. The Ottomans were thoroughly defeated, and soon enough, the Second Balkan War broke out, with Bulgarian nationalists demanding more territory. These were examples of territorial disputes. Once again, the 'Old Man of Europe' broke down and the balance of power shifted greatly in favour of the Triple Alliance. On top of that, Serbian nationalists, encouraged by their recent success, smelt blood in the water and made a claim on the ports of Bosnia, which were ethnically Serbian, with 3 million Serbs living in Bosnia. This relevant example of territorial disputes based on ideology, motivation and other factors kick-started the July Crisis in 1914, as Gavrilo Princip assassinated the Archduke of Austria. With that context out of the way, we find ourselves in the July plot. Through all the events leading up to it, to a free and critical thinker, it would be obvious that war would have broken out eventually and it was inevitable. July's diplomatic failure only drove the final nail into the coffin. The whole European peace was now unstable, and with Serbian terrorist groups knocking on the door, the whole metaphorical 'House of Peace' came crashing down. It would be ignorant to ignore the blatant failure of diplomacy in July leading to the outbreak, as it could have been prevented. When Kaiser Wilhelm went on holiday, a true example of mismanagement, he left the German diplomats to try and negotiate more peaceful terms with Serbia, something they were not interested in doing. Kaiser gave Austria the infamous 'blank cheque', encouraged them to invade Serbia, knowing that Russia would be forced to declare war on the Central Powers. This is an example of how the alliance system contributed to the outbreak of World War One. The ten impossible demands by Austria-Hungary were rejected by Serbia, and thus, they were promptly invaded. What followed was a complete breakdown of diplomacy between Germany and Russia, as full-on mobilisation ensued. Russia was the first to mobilise, indicating they were also not interested in peace talks. But after all, they were obliged to support Serbia after the embarrassment of the Bosnian Crisis of 1908. To conclude, the mismanagement of the crisis in 1914 was the final nail in the coffin, and much more complex factors from the long term laid the seeds of war.
EXAMPLE II:
"In the 1870s, Germany was created in the Hall of Mirrors in Versailles. Not half a century later, they were forced to sign the Versailles Treaty that was thought to end all wars. This caused WWI. This essay will argue that it was bad communication and alliances. There were many failures in the July crisis; however, the biggest flaw was the bad communication that was present among the world's superpowers. One important factor to consider is the limited technology at the time. Communication between countries so far apart was by telegram, which took weeks or even months to arrive. However, even when this is taken into account, some failures in communication were still avoidable. An example of such is Kaiser Wilhelm's blank cheque, where he gave Germany's unwavering support to Austria-Hungary (AH). However, what Kaiser had failed to notice was the 'domino effect' this would cause, leading to the joining of many countries after AH waged war on Serbia when they assassinated Franz Ferdinand. Additionally, though it was clear that Russia would have joined due to their adamant support for Serbia due to Pan-Slavism (which will be discussed later), the Kaiser failed to take this into account. However, not all mistakes came from Germany; the Tsar also didn't understand that his inclusion meant that Germany would join too to protect AH. Though they were cousins, it was clear that communication was not effective during the July crisis of 1914 and therefore led to a localized conflict becoming a world war. Additionally, this lack of communication could be chalked up to the belief that the war would be short. Many anticipated a war soon enough and would rather it happened when they were well-prepared. They therefore were more careless with their actions and might not have thought that communication would be necessary for a short war that would have happened eventually. However, the July Crisis was not the only thing that led to war; many long-term causes like nationalism were surely decisive factors. This was present in the Bosnian Crisis where AH took over Bosnia-Herzegovina, angering the Serbians who believed that the land belonged to them due to the large population of Serbs that inhabited it. At the time, Serbia had a strong belief in Pan-Slavism, which is when all Slavic people should be united, and AH was prohibiting them to do so. This led to claustrophobic feelings being developed in Serbia, as they believed it was their right to unify, and AH was limiting the possibilities for self-determination. Additionally, this angered Russia, which supported Serbia in its Pan-Slavic ideas. This is ultimately what led to Gavrilo Princip assassinating Franz Ferdinand and was the catalyst for the pro-Serbian public to be ready for war. These feelings were only further catalysts for the rising tensions between AH and Serbia, as seen when General Conrad von Hötzendorf advocated for war against Serbia no less than 25 times in 1918. These tensions ultimately worsened any possibility of compromise in the July crisis. Overall, nationalism was a key factor.
EXAMPLE III:
TRANSCRIPT: The July Crisis is widely known as the short-term cause of World War I. Therefore, it is crucial to understand its contribution to the failure in peace diplomacy, which ultimately started WWI on August 14th, 1914. This essay will argue that diplomatic failures throughout the July Crisis, such as the issuing of the Blank Cheque, contributed to WWI by solidifying European tensions through war. The issuing of the Blank Cheque by Kaiser Wilhelm to Austria-Hungary, considered on July 6th, 1914, was a diplomatic failure that catalysed Austria-Hungary's and Russia's declaration of war. As the Blank Cheque stated that Prussia would support any diplomatic decisions Austria-Hungary made in regards to the assassination of Crown Prince Franz Ferdinand on June 28th, 1914, Kaiser Wilhelm lost complete control over Germany's diplomacy, as AJP Taylor said himself. "Austria wanted" to punish Serbia for simply existing, as the tensions between Austria-Hungary and Serbia were conflicted on the concepts of Pan-Slavism and national sovereignty. This is critical because it emphasises that Kaiser Wilhelm failed to recognise the "domino effect" of his actions, in which he provided underestimated support to start a war. This is evidenced in Kaiser Wilhelm's complete unawareness of this diplomatic failure, which is emphasised by his actions after August 1914, in which he went on holiday. This action clearly indicates that the Kaiser had failed to recognise the impact of the July Crisis. Nevertheless, Kaiser Wilhelm's impact on German diplomacy in regards to the Blank Cheque not only encouraged Austria-Hungary to declare war but also influenced the decisions of Tsar Alexander. The issuing of the Blank Cheque was a catastrophic failure as Kaiser Wilhelm failed to recognise the tensions that had been brewing in the Balkans as a result of Austria-Hungary's annexation of Bosnia-Herzegovina in 1908. Determined to protect its southern brethren, after this event, Russia mobilized against Austria-Hungary on July 31st, 1914. Thus, the diplomatic failure of the Blank Cheque on July 6th, 1914, contributed to the outbreak of WWI as it provided both Austria-Hungary and Russia an opportunity to catalyse war. However, one must also consider how this failure in diplomacy caused the mobilisation of Germany and France on August 1st, 1914, as the system of alliances set up before the July Crisis initiated the involvement of other European countries. Hence, Germany's inability to understand the consequences of their diplomacy transformed a third Balkan War into a European conflict. Nevertheless, as argued by Hew Strachan, the diplomacy of the July Crisis was the "final straw" that launched WWI as a global conflict. One must consider that Germany's war crimes in Belgium were not the reason that Britain abandoned its isolationist ideals and entered WWI on August 4th, 1914. As stated by Niall Ferguson, Britain's participation in WWI truly made it the first global conflict, since Britain ruled over 24% of the world's land mass in 1914. Therefore, we conclude that diplomatic failure in the July Crisis catalysed a series of events that provoked Britain into participating in the war, and thus, initiated the First World War. To conclude, the diplomatic failure in the July Crisis, in which the issuing of the Blank Cheque escalated a Serbian and Austria-Hungarian affair into a European conflict, set the foundation for Germany's actions in Belgium between August 1st and 4th. Therefore, the July Crisis was crucial in the outbreak of WWI as its events led to Britain's declaration of war against Germany on August 4th, 1914. 
EXAMPLE III:
TRANSCRIPT: The July Crisis is widely known as the short-term cause of World War I. Therefore, it is crucial to understand its contribution to the failure in peace diplomacy, which ultimately started WWI on August 14th, 1914. This essay will argue that diplomatic failures throughout the July Crisis, such as the issuing of the Blank Cheque, contributed to WWI by solidifying European tensions through war. The issuing of the Blank Cheque by Kaiser Wilhelm to Austria-Hungary, considered on July 6th, 1914, was a diplomatic failure that catalysed Austria-Hungary's and Russia's declaration of war. As the Blank Cheque stated that Prussia would support any diplomatic decisions Austria-Hungary made in regards to the assassination of Crown Prince Franz Ferdinand on June 28th, 1914, Kaiser Wilhelm lost complete control over Germany's diplomacy, as AJP Taylor said himself. "Austria wanted" to punish Serbia for simply existing, as the tensions between Austria-Hungary and Serbia were conflicted on the concepts of Pan-Slavism and national sovereignty. This is critical because it emphasises that Kaiser Wilhelm failed to recognise the "domino effect" of his actions, in which he provided underestimated support to start a war. This is evidenced in Kaiser Wilhelm's complete unawareness of this diplomatic failure, which is emphasised by his actions after August 1914, in which he went on holiday. This action clearly indicates that the Kaiser had failed to recognise the impact of the July Crisis. Nevertheless, Kaiser Wilhelm's impact on German diplomacy in regards to the Blank Cheque not only encouraged Austria-Hungary to declare war but also influenced the decisions of Tsar Alexander. The issuing of the Blank Cheque was a catastrophic failure as Kaiser Wilhelm failed to recognise the tensions that had been brewing in the Balkans as a result of Austria-Hungary's annexation of Bosnia-Herzegovina in 1908. Determined to protect its southern brethren, after this event, Russia mobilized against Austria-Hungary on July 31st, 1914. Thus, the diplomatic failure of the Blank Cheque on July 6th, 1914, contributed to the outbreak of WWI as it provided both Austria-Hungary and Russia an opportunity to catalyse war. However, one must also consider how this failure in diplomacy caused the mobilisation of Germany and France on August 1st, 1914, as the system of alliances set up before the July Crisis initiated the involvement of other European countries. Hence, Germany's inability to understand the consequences of their diplomacy transformed a third Balkan War into a European conflict. Nevertheless, as argued by Hew Strachan, the diplomacy of the July Crisis was the "final straw" that launched WWI as a global conflict. One must consider that Germany's war crimes in Belgium were not the reason that Britain abandoned its isolationist ideals and entered WWI on August 4th, 1914. As stated by Niall Ferguson, Britain's participation in WWI truly made it the first global conflict, since Britain ruled over 27% of the world's land mass in 1914. Therefore, we conclude that diplomatic failure in the July Crisis catalysed a series of events that provoked Britain into participating in the war, and thus, initiated the First World War. To conclude, the diplomatic failure in the July Crisis, in which the issuing of the Blank Cheque escalated a Serbian and Austria-Hungarian affair into a European conflict, set the foundation for Germany's actions in Belgium between August 1st and 4th. Therefore, the July Crisis was crucial in the outbreak of WWI as its events led to Britain's declaration of war against Germany on August 4th, 1914.
